This piece focuses on the emotion of grieving. To help bring this emotion across, I made the style harsh and grating, the contrast high, and the design structure be reminiscent of tears. I also worked on the body language and expression of the portrait to heighten the sense of desperation. I made a lot of changes to this piece as I went along and based on the critique. I took out distracting elements like table "legs" on each side and a random puddle on the bottom, tried to define the water droplets better, add the texture of wood to the table, and make the values of the face more drastic and finished. I think I still need to do something about the white on the top background; it looks distracting. I also am not quite satisfied with the face's expression.
Hey Daniel, I really like the work you do. I think your topic is really interesting. I bet it's really hard to portray facial expressions. I think that to make this picture even better then it already is, that you should make the teardrops look more raindroppy. I mean that you should make them more like water. They look too thick or something. But overall, you did a good job. :)
ReplyDeleteThis piece in my view is alot stronger than your last piece you were able to take the advice on wensday and also the advice of Ms.Milet and really strengthen your piece. I really like the way that you went back and really defined the table under your arms.
ReplyDeletei like how you incorperated the water into this peice to show the dull, tiring emotion that this boy is getting. The inclusion of mixed media (newspaper) also helped to amphasize the reading theme. the blue and greens used for shading also helped the project "flow". Mixing these colors together makes it seem like it is under a darkly lit place.
ReplyDeleteI like your background behind the head because its not too distracting and the light streaks in it make it seem not too dark. I really like this piece and my only suggestion would be to take a look at the eye on the right because it seems smaller than the one on the left but other than that I really like what you've done!
ReplyDeleteNice Job Daniel. I think that this piece was improved so much by the critique on wednesday! Just evidence that you are problem soving and taking the criticisms and applying them effectively to your artwork. I think that this piece really demonstrates the whole idea behind your concentration. I can definetly see grief in this piece, and i really like the idea of the design structure behind the subject. It really makes the portrait unique and interesting.
ReplyDeleteDaniel- Nice job! Now that I look at the photograph, I would recommend working back into the shirt and adding more value so that the arms and face come forward a bit. I think that this will help emphasize the grief in the face a bit more. I also agree with Sara's comment above that the water could be more drop-like. Otherwise, I appreciate the risk-taking in your drawing and the focus on structure to create your composition and emphasize the emotional quality. The white at the top may be a little distracting behind the head and I would downplay that slightly. Overall, well done and good decision-making!
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