This piece is, sadly, the last of my "freebies." I feel like I transformed this one the most from what it was before compared to the two other freebies. This emotion is "pensive," or thoughtful/confused/ruminating. The jagged design structure is supposed to represent the portrait's jumbled thoughts, with the glued-on scrabble board pieces the actual jumbled-up thoughts and words. Changes I made to the piece before and after the critique include altering the expression of the face slightly (lowering the eyebrows and adding values around the temple) to make the expression more "pensive" and less "vacant." :) I also cleaned up some of the scribbles I had made with charcoal previously and added more newspaper in some areas. As for the design structure, which used to be an irrelevant "D to S" gradation from another project I had done, I colored everything black to make it less busy, and added another concentration structure of scrabble pieces on top of it. I feel like this piece is strong because it has many layers and high contrast.
daniel i'm not goanna lie. she looks angry.... with consideration to the theme of emotion this is probally not the best though i do love the scrabble pieces and the use of mixed media the face just needs a little more work.
ReplyDeleteI think you reworked this piece very successfully. I like how you've changed her expression as it shows what you are trying to portray and also your improvement over time. Design wise I would kind of like to see less Scrabble pieces around her face as it I think it gets a little busy but if that is what you want to go along with the idea of pensive that's fine. Overall its a strong piece.
ReplyDeleteReworking this piece was a really good idea. although I liked the first version, the second version is much more engaging. It would be cool if you could make the concentration structure more emphasized. But I love the cool colors and the lines throughout the piece. nice work
ReplyDeleteThis piece shows the greatest amount of contrast of all your work and is a good reference point for you when developing contrast in future works. You did a successful job integrating the scrabble pieces with the design and the face!
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